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It’s a warm night and she’s sitting on her roof again,
legs on either side of the point so her chi is good.
I think she does it because she can never decide
what world to belong to. I think she’s happy, but I think
she can only look at the sky so much before she needs
a different high to calm her enraged soul.
She is beautiful, even in her over-sized men’s pyjama pants
and flowy yellow halter top.
Everything about her is subtle, like a baby spider that clings to
her feather hands.

She is light.

I want to ask her what she thinks about up there, but I’ll
probably never understand it. I want to put her under something,
I want to stop being enraptured by her sea blue eyes
and I want to classify her in my mind.
She doesn’t do anything for me, but I find myself drawn to
her warmth, fighting to exist in her world. She’s like
the stars in that way; you can see her, you can come close to
touching her, but staring at her will only burn your eyes.
I don’t think she even knows what is at her core.
©2009 ~en-tropy
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I haven't posted anything in quite a while,
comments and feedback appreciated.
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The was you convey the thoughts of this boy that is entranced by a girl are so realistic that the reader cannot help but also become intrigued. All the similes are beautiful btw. I love it

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*A seditious guise temps me*
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you are truly one who expresses well,
I really love the story you have painted in my mind.
"I think she does it because she can never decide
what world to belong to"
Quite a few lines in this really stand out for me,
and all together it is a beautiful piece.
You should write more often,
also the strength in the last line is impressive.
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Thank you :heart:

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Our hell is a good life.
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I am trying to devote more time in my life to write, because I love doing it.
Thank you lots for your beautiful comments :)


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Our hell is a good life.

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